The Spanish Gazelle

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The Spanish Gazelle

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I've started writing horror fiction, in a story entitled the Spanish Gazelle. You can read the first part here.

edit: The second part is here.

edit 2: The third part is here
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I like how you interweave a subtle tone of dread throughout the story. Very deft.
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The terror marches inexorably forwards. These characters, these men I have created, they don't know what awaits them.

And it is not just they that will be terrified! It is you!

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I am horrified watching these people go about their daily lives, unable to warn them of the terror that awaits them!
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Alright I'm going to write the third part now, but be warned! There will be an instance of horror in this episode of the story. A slight breeze of horror, but it tells of hurricanes to come!

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Okay I'll try my best not to faint while reading it. If I do and have some sort of horrendous head injury, I'm holding you fiscally responsible.
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Here's part three. We have moved from one to two on the horror graph. However this graph is an exponential one, and as we progress we shall wish we were back here, back at two.

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